Hi! I am Summer. I am 12 years old. There  are 4 people in my family. They are my mom,my dad,my brother and me.

    My dad is tall and strong.He has a car.In the morning,he takes my brother and me to school in his car.Then he drives to work.

     My mom is short,but she is smart.She is an assistant.She usually walks to work.She often comes back home at 12:00 noon and eat lunch with us. My mom likes reading books and doing housework.

     My brother is one year younger than me.He is strong.He is shorter than me. We study in the same school,but we're in different classes.He likes playing computer games and playing chess.

     I am a clever girl.I like drawing,reading and listening to music.I have black and long hair.I'm 160 cm tall.

     On the weekend,we often go hiking and do sports. Sometimes I play with my friends.

     This is my happy family!

点评：学生详细的介绍了自己的家庭，该文章条理清楚，把“我的一家人”的每一个人性格特点都显现出来，语言丰富、用词准确。同时作者能够准确的运用一般时态，尤其是在主语为第三人称单数时，能够注意到动词的用法。